News Writing: 'hit' or 'collision'

We were asked to write a news story from a sussex police press release, this is what i came up with;

A 13-year-old boy died after being hit by a car in sussex, yesterday afternoon.
The 62-year-old driver and his passenger, were both uninjured. The boy was rushed to East Surrey Hospital with serious injuries, where he later died.
The driver of the Land Rover was arrested, at the scene, on suspicion of careless driving and has been released on bail until January.

In one of the examples Brian chose to show to the group, 'hit by a car' was discussed to decide whether or not it was the right phase to use as opposed to 'collision'. Turns out we can, but can sometimes be a problem because it suggests there is someone to blame and is defamatory.
Mentioning the car was a Land Rover was bought up; it doesn't need to be included because what car it was is irrelevant, speed is, even though Land Rovers are bigger cars and look as though they could do more damage than your average smart car....